Perhaps a victim of too many participants and too little time, a panel featuring the WGA screenwriting nominees Thursday night at the guild’s Beverly Hills theater was heavy on niceties with only traces of insight. Three Moneyball writers — Aaron Sorkin, Stan Chervin and Steven Zaillian (who also wrote The Girl With The Dragon Tattoo) — were joined by The Descendants’ writer-director Alexander Payne, Hugo‘s John Logan, Bridesmaids‘ Annie Mumolo, 50/50‘s Will Reiser and The Help‘s Tate Taylor for an hour-plus discussion mostly peppered with practical advice dished to a large audience of new or aspiring screenwriters. The event was billed as a pre-cursor to Sunday’s WGA Awards, featuring the WGA’s and Oscar’s nominees for original and adapted screenplay.
A couple of panelists did offer up moments of insidery detail. Payne tackled his screenplay for The Descendants after drafts were delivered by the project’s other writers Nat Faxon and Jim Rash, but he said he had to overlook their take on the story before warming up to the project. “I couldn’t get into the film through their drafts,” Payne said. “I respected their work very much but I had to return to the novel. I learned some of the things I didn’t want to do [with the story] through their drafts.” Payne said the novel by Kaui Hart Hemmings paved the way for his version of the screenplay, noting that this was his most “faithful adaptation” he’s done to date. “The [Hawaiian] aristocracy is very insular. They’re very suspicious of outsiders who come in and see what they want to see and leave,” he said. “My principal audience is the people who live there and I wanted people in Hawaii to believe I got it right.”
Payne said previous drafts of Descendants played up the high jinks of the younger daughter (played in the film by Amara Miller), but he said he “jettisoned that” and instead focused on the relationship between George Clooney’s character and the older daughter, played by Shailene Woodley. When writing, Payne said he likes to keep things “austere.” Though he may write a long script with details, when he’s ready to show it, minimalism wins out. “I like to keep it super austere. Ninety-one pages is the best length for a script.”
Bridesmaids co-writer Mumolo (she wrote the script with Kristen Wiig) had the audience laughing describing a scene in an earlier draft that was eventually nixed by producer Judd Apatow. It involved Wiig’s character Annie, who has a surreal dream sequence meant to emphasize the financial disparity with her fellow bridesmaids. “We had a scene in which she tries on an expensive dress and she fantasizes she is being chased by Christian Bale in a forest and then it cuts to him combing her hair while she is lying on a bear-skin rug.” Apatow said Annie’s character needed a “bigger screw-up” and the Bale idea eventually morphed into the lunch scene in which Annie picks a restaurant that causes her fellow bridesmaids to get violently sick. “Judd also said he didn’t think we’d get Christian Bale to do this,” Mumolo said.
The Help writer-director Taylor said he is not wary of changing his script at any moment. While filming in Mississippi, he said he called the studio to tell them he decided to cut a number of scenes. “I told them I wasn’t going to shoot five scenes because I knew they’d end up on the cutting-room floor,” he said. “A producorial hat came over me and I knew they’d end up being a waste of money, so I just didn’t do them.” Taylor won a round of applause with his advice for the audience about screenwriting: “Just be fearless,” he said. “Be willing to take a crap on your computer and go for it. Even from the worst stuff you’ll find a nugget of truth. Don’t overthink it.”
Moneyball scribes Chervin, Sorkin and Zaillian hinted that their project was anything but a cake walk. Chervin said his work on the film was like “the dancing bear,” and joked that “nobody thought you could make a movie out of a book that is a 300-page celebration of statistics.” Sorkin skipped nuance, noting the project was a “long process” with producer Scott Rudin and director Bennett Miller. “I think a lot of people know here that the Moneyball process was not smooth sailing from beginning to end,” he said. He added with a laugh, “I want to buy the rights to the making of Moneyball.” Added Zaillian: “Things that are easy are generally not good, so Moneyball must be great.”


What a pompous ASS! Would somebody please let the air out of Alexander Payne’s head? He’s about to achieve critical mass!
The Descendents is the most overhyped, overlauded piece of dreck of the last ten years. Every moment is so slow and purposeful, the performances would fit right in on the hallmark channel and every plot point was telegraphed and written out for a two year old to follow. It plays like a first time filmmaker’s movie. Congratulations Fox Searchlight for making people see this sow’s ear as a silk purse. But what an ass to diss the other credited writers — no class.
This man made one good movie(ELECTION) and needs a reality check.
Hey, Mark! Jealous much? No class.
Hey Alexander. Defensive much?
As pompous as that was to just negate Dean Pelton’s work on a good movie (and it WAS good) the man’s talent can’t be denied. Election was great, but About Schmidt and Sideways were much deeper more meaningful films. The guy doesn’t make bad movies.
Agreed re: The Descendants. Clooney mugged, most emotional beats were undermined by a sitcom rimshot that defused the drama, and for a movie allegedly written for Hawaiians – it was just a bunch of haoles.
Payne loves to rewrite other writers. Sadly it’s becoming his stock and trade. Paynes draft is the least satisfying of all and feels underwritten and unrealized. I thought the film deadly dull.
Payne has always been a very rude and arrogant person to work with from a writing perspective. I’m glad he outed himself as resenting what he can’t do. Without a novel and a writing partner he can’t construct a screenplay.
Glad his douchebagery was made so clear.
Payne is such a rude loser. No class whatsoever. Sadly that’s the real Alexander Payne. A privileged white guy who has no clue at all.
This was not an event to trash the writers who gave him the idea for his movie. What a low life. I’ve always heard he preyed on writers he could rewrite and push aside. This proves it.
It is simply impossible that Payne wasn’t influenced by or didn’t mirror scenes from earlier drafts by his co-writers. They adapted the SAME book with much of the SAME brilliant dialogue and layered, rich characters from Kaui Hart Hemmings. Is he kidding?
I find it truly unfortunate and small of him to have let his ego make such a credit grab.
This is a terrific movie that Payne, Rash and Faxon should all be proud of.
I couldn’t agree with Mark more.
Payne is incredibly overrated, and The Descendants sums up his entire career so far: Clearly punching above it’s weight.
This years group of nominees, whilst the majority of them are extremely talented, highlights the fact that this is indeed, possibly one of the weakest years for screenplays on record.
How else could anyone explain why scripts like these are there?
Moneyball; Almost a sports version of The Descendants; it just failed to deliver on every level, and it’s lead actor did nothing worth remembering, yet is getting a bunch of acclaim for it.
Hugo; Poor dialogue, poor story, poor everything, plotless.
The Descendants; One dimensional characters, with a poor character arc which just wasn’t believable because Matt King (Clooney) opting out of the land deal, had nothing to do with what he had learnt, because he had learnt NOTHING.
And just on Clooney’s so called ‘Performance’ in The Descendants: If anyone out there can find him not bobbing, weaving, mugging or moving his head in some way in any film whilst he acts, give yourself a pat on the back; you have found something very rare indeed.
Bring on the nominations for 2013, as all round, this is a year that is most certainly not worth remembering.
Faxon and Rash’s earlier draft made THE BLACK LIST in 2008.
Alexander Payne didn’t write a word of that draft.
In fact, that draft probably made him realize that he should focus on making it a priority for him to direct.
No matter how one spins it, their credit cannot and should not be undermined on this.
I agree Descendants was just meh.
Wish I could say I loved it. Payne is a talent — but he doesn’t deserve anything this awards season.
Agree with Mark. Someone described it to me as ‘the Mehcendents’ lol.
Completely agree is hard to believe that this movie is from the same guy that did Election although I also enjoyed Sideways.
The descendants is the most overrated movie of the year, it just doesn’t add up to anything. And the performances of Shailene Woodley and George Clooney? Unremarkable, seriously Clooney was better on ER 20 years ago……….people grasping for straws have even praised the performances of Matthew Lillard and Judy Greer for invisible roles that could have been played by anyone, this is just pure hollywood politics similar to that other Clooney “masterpiece” Up in the air.
You’re not wrong about Descendants sucking but Up In The Air doesn’t deserve to be mentioned in the same breath. It at least had a story, characters and a surprise or two. Descendants truly has nothing to recommend it besides some pretty shots of a resort on Kauaii.
I went to this event last night. Last year was much better. John August asked one question and then asked each participant for their response. There was a lot of play and conversation back and forth on the topics.
This year Ron Bass went down the line and talked to each participant individually. It felt more like a “one on one” conversation rather than a panel.
I feel like we missed out on “off the cuff” comments and more interaction. It was a low energy night.
It’s not that one style is right or wrong, but I found last year’s approach to the panel to be much more engaging and entertaining.
Payne is a funny guy; he’s much like his male protagonists, completely self-absorbed and living out the rest of his days in a slow decline….
Not cool for Payne to diss the other writers on his project. Big fan of his work, but this was far from his best…
Don’t forget his comment about how his primary audience is the royals in Hawaii. Forget the rest of us, he did it just for them. How precious.
I agree with all the DESCENDANTS haters here. It’s a tedious, self-indulgent piece of filmmaking with a lot to posture and little of interest to show us.
And Payne is really going out of his way this awards season to stoke the hate with quotes like this: “Ninety-one pages is the best length for a script.”
Thanks, Lew Hunter.
No wonder he uses voice overs so much. Without them, he’d have 60 page scripts, apparently.
I have to agree on “Descendants.” There was so much exposition and v.o. at the top and then so much lame sitcomy humor throughout. Clooney had the same expression in every scene.
This is Oscar worthy?
The other writers’ version of “The Descendants” sounds a lot more fun. Maybe it can be shot as the “reboot” of the series.
Alexander Payne comes across every time as a rude self centered asshole. He is so full of himself and his movies are actually boring and lack any kind of longevity. Who watches Sideways twice? No one Alex.
As a writer, I’m so glad there is so much hate on here for the Descendants. It blows my mind that the industry can celebrate something like that – so mediocre, with no insight or drama. And for Payne to suggest that he did something wonderful with tough drafts, it blows my mind. All you have to do is look at THE FUTURE, or BEGINNERS – those are real writers, with screenplays worth celebrating.
I’ve read the early Naxon/Rash draft of “The Descendants” and preferred it to Payne’s — no clunky voiceover, a brisker pace, better balance of humor to pathos, less time devoted to the (ultimately irrelevant) subplot about island real estate. Pity Payne didn’t shoot that draft, or we might have had a movie on par with “Sideways.”
Steve Zaillian is the only genuine writer of the bunch.
hey Alexander- I hope you don’t lose too much sleep over the comments posted here from the nobodies in the peanut gallery.
My only beef with you is that you take too long between movies.
What’s so wrong with a little criticism of Payne? Are we all expected to clap in unison every time he farts? To be honest, I’m sick and tired of reading gushing reviews about The Descendants. Granted, a few people posting here sound a bit too jealous for their own good, but The Descendants isn’t a great film. Good enough, but not great.
I have seen The Descendants twice, and do have to agree, there is too much exposition at the front end. It’s to the point that the dialogue sounds stilted and fake. Not to mention the acting. Weak. Payne loves v.o. but just because he gets a stiffy over it, doesn’t mean it fits in the film. He also could have handled the whole subplot/land deal storyline better.
There are still bits of the movie that rub me wrong. Like, the family takes off on a quick trip when the mother is about to die at any second? Seriously? No one even calls to find out her condition? Are they that laid-back in Hawaii? Considering the film revolves around an impending death, emotionally it’s sometimes tepid at best.
Payne deserves the criticism because he is a better filmmaker than this. Also, he has the power and influence to green-light any project he wants. For someone with his talent and influence, this is not his best work. Maybe he’s rusty and off his game after his extended vacation.
No, Payne will have no trouble at all sleeping at night. Not with all the sycophants and fawning film critics out there willing to stroke his ego. No, he has nothing to fear from us “nobodies”. The ones willing to point out that the Emperor has no clothes.
Payne is a straight up dick for doing that. What a small, angry, sad, pathetic a-hole.
Faxon & Rash’s Blacklist draft was better than the movie. And included A LOT of what Payne is taking credit for.
His lack of generosity is telling.
I would agree with a lot of the criticism of A. Payne’s comments. I also agree that The Descendants wasn’t his best film.
However, the film wasn’t that bad. You have to understand that the movie was meant to be a reallistic potrait of how a family would react under those circumstances. Its not supposed to have contrived character arcs.
whatever the facts are, that a draft who reached the black list was somehow not ‘for him’, this was not a private screenwriting class where it would be of any importance to unload. it’s not the worst thing someone can say, but it’s incredibly stupid for its transparent objective: hogging credit for writing the script.
when obviously this went to a wga panel, and whatever you think of them, they decided the other writers deserved credit. you want to bitch about that, take it to the panel, or don’t go to a panel that would have these writers taking the stage.
what I don’t get is – is this guy so obtuse not to realize the damage he did to himself? what was the lure then to go up there and say that? it’s not like he is being ignored in the press. he could say this at a thousand interviews and then be consequential to his words and not show up for that panel.
one can hardly be upset by dicks in this business, but mind-boggling stupidity always gets me.